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Temptation-
Wonder-
The sense of something new beyond the day,
Calling out-
Words spoken over the span of time chime,
Harmonious melodies guide me into the forest-
A voice tells me to forget,
Say my final goodbyes to the once known,
For am I home,
The untamed night will never forsake me-
Her lips will always bless me,
Flood-
Burn-
Ensure-
The beginning of new life beyond the day.
©2008-2009 ~Lil-Angelic-Star
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Random attempt at a short poem.

I think it needs more but I'm not sure.

Well....

I also don't write short poems all that often so that might be the reason why I feel that way.

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:iconzeldaconnetion:
needs a bit more composition but it's good
the meter feels, strange but that's only a small problem


I like it^^

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Sincerely,
Saeiane,
Mephistopheles D. Grimm,
D. H. The Second.
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Yeah I know, the problem is I'm not sure what to fully do with it. It just popped in my head for a brief moment. I've been reading it over and over again trying to see if I get a spark, but nothing.... Weird huh?

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:iconzeldaconnetion:
a little weird, maybe keep it as it is and just edit it around?

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Sincerely,
Saeiane,
Mephistopheles D. Grimm,
D. H. The Second.
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mostly what I'm doing.

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:blackrose: Lasair :blackrose:

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